Lydia Bennet is a
problem character for both the reader and the writer. Because of her
troublesome and immature ways, readers just don’t like her. For the most parts, writers ignore her or
allow her to remain an antagonist in most tales. After all, who really wants to
spend too much time in Lydia’s head?
I certainly
didn’t. Nope, no thank you. Would much rather hang out with characters I
actually liked, especially considering writing a novel about would require at
least a year’s commitment to spend much quality time with these story-people.
Definitely not
going to write about Lydia Bennet.
The only way I
could write about her would be to find a way to see her genuinely reformed.
Hmmm, I wonder what that would take? What kind of people, what kind of environment
would it take to make a character like that really change from the inside out?
Probably a residential setting of some sort…a school probably. And some strong
female role models to demonstrate what true ladylike behavior looked like…
Oh, shoot, that sounds
an awful lot like a plot bunny.
A big, bad plot
bunny with teeth that insisted on settling into my office and sitting on my
desk with the cats. Stupid thing even made friends with the cats! The cats
taught it to purr. Enough! I’ll write the story already!
And thus, I have
taken The Trouble to Check Her.
Read an excerpt
Lydia staggered
off the public coach in front of Summerseat’s coaching station and drew a deep
breath. So many people crammed into the coach! Had she breathed since their
last stop?
What a horrid way
to travel—packed in with the fetid odors of her unwashed companions. Mr. Darcy
might have transported her in his private carriage. He had more than one, after
all.
She pulled herself
up straight and retied her bonnet strings. Her back might not ever be right
again.
How glimflashy
Darcy had been—a perfect match for Lizzy with her back up—ordering her this way
and that, deciding where she should go and what she should do. What did either
of them know about anything? What right did they have to ruin her life?
And nosy Aunt
Gardiner, with all her intrusive and personal questions. Why did she need to
know what transpired between her and Wickham in the privacy of their room?
A sharp breeze
whistled past. Lydia pulled her shawl tighter over her shoulders.
Why had they made
her leave anyway? Lady Catherine’s opinion hardly counted for anything now,
since Papa was moving the family back to London.
She dodged the
huffy old woman who had been crowding her the entire journey. The fussock
snorted and glared down her nose as she passed.
Crosspatch.
Papa had a new
patron now, the Earl of Matlock. How wonderful it would be to rub shoulders
with an earl! An earl with unmarried sons was even better.
But now, because
of Mr. Darcy, she would never meet any of them. She stomped. Papa declared he
would take no chances with an unruly daughter jeopardizing his new position.
Oh, this was so
unfair!
She wove through
the stale-smelling crowd, elbowing several young men out of her way, so she
could climb up on a bench to scan the crowd. No one seemed to be looking for
her.
Why did they make
her travel alone? Mama would be appalled that she traveled without a chaperone.
But Papa would not pay for a maid to accompany her. Neither would Mr. Darcy,
though he might have easily afforded it.
It was all so
cruel! Everything she had known was lost to her—Wickham, her home, her friends,
her sisters—and it was all Lizzy and Darcy’s fault.
She jumped down
from the bench. Had she ever been so alone?
She rubbed away
prickles on the back of her neck. A rainstorm must be on the way. Might as well
wait more comfortably. She sank down on the rickety looking bench, whipping her
head this way and that.
Oh, this was so
very, very vexing! Someone was supposed to meet her and take her to the school—where
were they?
Perhaps the coach
driver knew. She hurried back to the coach.
“Sir, excuse me,
can you—”
The driver and
another man untied the ropes that held the trunks to the coach.
“Out of the way
girl.” The driver grunted and shouldered her out of his path.
“But I need—”
“What you need is
not my concern.” He heaved a trunk to his shoulder.
How rude! He stank
like a farmhand. Perhaps the other—
“You’re gonna get
hurt, girl. Outta the way.” He trudged past, arms laden with luggage.
Oh! How could they
ignore a lady? Did they not recognize she was a gentlewoman?
She looked around.
No one noticed her, no one cared. Her hands trembled and her insides knotted
beneath a welling scream.
“Miss Bennet?”
She whirled so
fast the world spun.
A girl, slightly
older than herself, in a plain, drab gown stood just behind her.
“Yes … that is
me.” Lydia gulped air to force the world to stop moving.
“I am Miss
Annabella Fitzgilbert, from Mrs. Drummond's school. There is a chaise waiting
for us.”
At last!
“What took you so
long? I have been waiting simply for ages. You should have been on time. I will
inform your mistress.”
The girl shook her
head and smiled the same sort of smile Jane used to: lips pressed tight into a
firm line, eyes narrow with lots of creases beside. She was not nearly as
pretty as Jane though—quite a plain thing really. And she had freckles on her
nose.
“My trunks. I do
not know where they are. See to them.” Lydia waved her hand toward the coach
and scanned the street for an elegant chaise and handsome driver to carry her
away from this nightmare.
“My name is Miss
Fitzgilbert, not ‘abigail’. I am neither your maid nor any servant at all. If
you want your trunks, you best see to them yourself.”
Lydia stomped.
“You cannot talk to me like that.”
“I can and I did.
What is more, I suggest you become accustomed to it soon. You will find
whomever you think you are matters little here.”
“But—”
Miss
High-and-Mighty Fitzgilbert lifted an open hand. “Stop it. I do not wish to
hear. I do not care. Now attend to your things before they are stolen.” She
pointed toward the baggage piled near the public coach.
Lydia swished her
skirts and hurried to the pile of luggage. She wrestled her three trunks into
an awkward stack.
“Is that
everything?” Miss Fitzgilbert crossed her arms and tapped her foot.
“Oh, I left my bag
on the coach!”
She pinched the
bridge of her nose. “Well, you best hope you can find it. I shall watch your
trunks. Go, now. Quickly!”
Lydia scurried
back to the coach. Miss Fitzgilbert was horrible. Who was she? What if she were
one of the school mistresses? Oh, that would be dreadful indeed. What kind of
awful place was this school?
There—tucked under
the seat she had occupied. She snatched her bag and jumped down, almost atop
Miss Fitzgilbert.
“Hurry along now.
Our driver has loaded your things. We must not keep him waiting.” She grabbed
Lydia’s elbow and propelled her through the crowd.
She pulled her arm
away.
Miss Fitzgilbert
stomped off.
Would the chaise leave
without her? It just might.
Lydia ran.
The hack waited
near the street corner, dusty and plain and obviously worn, just like the
driver. He grunted at them. Miss Fitzgilbert pushed her into a seat and climbed
in after her. The chaise lurched into motion before Lydia was even settled.
Soon the coaching
inn was out of sight, replaced by the dingy, dreary buildings of Summerseat.
This place was nothing to London. It was not even much compared to Kent. Did it
even have assembly rooms?
Not that she would
get to see much of them. Regular balls and parties were probably not going to
be part of Mrs. Drummond’s curriculum of improvement.
She fell into the
hard seat. “Is it far … to the school, I mean?”
“Not very, the
house is on the edge of town. We would walk except for the trunks, of course.”
“Of course,” Lydia
murmured.
“You are arriving
from London, but are recently from Kent, I understand.” The freckles on her
nose twitched when she smiled that Jane-ish smile.
Jane had sense
enough not to have freckles.
“Yes, my father—”
Miss Fitzgilbert
turned her face away. “Mrs. Drummond requires that we do not speak of our
previous stations.”
“Why ever not?
That must be the stupidest thing I have ever heard.”
How dare Miss
High-and-Mighty roll her eyes!
Had they not been
in a moving coach, Lydia would have stormed away.
“You know why you
have been sent here, do you not?”
“Because my sister
is high-handed and her husband very cruel indeed.”
“And your loss of
virtue and reputation is their fault, I imagine?”
What did she know
of that?
“Indeed it is. I
would be married now apart from their interference.”
Who would have
expected such an unladylike snort to explode from such a prim little thing?
“If you are as the
rest of us, you should count your good fortune not to be married right now. He
was probably a scoundrel—a blackguard of the worst sort.”
“How would you
know?”
“You regard
yourself unique? Let me assure you, you are not. Every one of us shares a
similar tale of virtue lost. Not one of the men in question has been worthy of
the moniker ‘gentleman’.”
“You do not know—”
“I do not need to.
Every girl who comes to this school has virtually the same story. Any man who
would put you in the position to be sent here is no gentleman.”
Lydia tossed her
head and sniffed. “Well, you are wrong. I am not like any of the others.”
“I have heard
that, too.” Miss Fitzgilbert squeezed her temples.
Now she looked
like Lizzy.
“Some of us have
come to appreciate our own folly and are grateful for Mrs. Drummond’s
intervention and that our future is much improved by our attendance here. But
there are those who do not see it that way. I think you might be that sort. You
should know those of us she has helped have no patience with those too proud to
recognize their good fortune.”
What a dreadful
sort of superiority she displayed. Who did she think she was?
The carriage
turned down a short drive leading to a large quaint house set off the road. The
sign in front read: Summerseat Abbey,
and in smaller letters, Girl’s Seminary.
So this was Mrs.
Drummond’s school for girls.
Book Blurb
Running off with
Mr. Wickham was a great joke—until everything turned arsey-varsey. That spoilsport Mr. Darcy caught them and
packed Lydia off to a hideous boarding school for girls who had lost their
virtue.
It would improve
her character, he said.
Ridiculous, she
said.
Mrs. Drummond, the
school’s headmistress, has shocking expectations for the girls. They must share
rooms, do chores, attend lessons, and engage in charitable work, no matter how
well born they might be. She even forces them to wear mobcaps! Refusal could
lead to finding themselves at the receiving end of Mrs. Drummond's cane—if they
were lucky. The unlucky ones could be dismissed and found a position … as a
menial servant.
Everything and
everyone at the school is uniformly horrid. Lydia hates them all, except
possibly the music master, Mr. Amberson, who seems to have the oddest ideas
about her. He might just understand her better than she understands herself.
Can she find a way
to live up to his strange expectations, or will she spend the rest of her life
as a scullery maid?
Maria Grace has her PhD in Educational Psychology and is
a 16 year veteran of the university classroom where she taught courses in human
growth and development, learning, test development and counseling. None of
which have anything to do with her undergraduate studies in
economics/sociology/managerial studies/behavior sciences.
She blogs at Random Bits of Fascination, mainly about her fascination with Regency era history and its role in her
fiction. Her newest novel, The Troble to Check Her, was released in
March, 2016. Both Science Fiction and Fantasy projects are currently in the
works. Her books, fiction and nonfiction, are available at all major online
booksellers.
13 comments:
I too have never thought it would be a good idea to be insight Lydia's head. But I am,after reading the excerpt, rather curious about this story.
I wonder how long it takes for Lydia to comply
So exciting. I loved following this story on-line!!
I read the first (?) incarnation of this story online and ended up actually liking Lydia by the end. Never would have thought it possible! Am looking forward to reading this version and enjoying it all over again.
Sounds like a fun story, even if Lydia that is at it's center. Would love to read it :)
I ended up loving Lydia, a character I never imagined I could even like. I was surprised, but it all happened so naturally.
I ended up loving Lydia, a character I never imagined I could even like. I was surprised, but it all happened so naturally.
I so need to read this!!!
thank you for the giveaway......
cyn209 at juno dot com
I must say I am not usually a Lydia fan. But I love this story! Wonderful excerpt. Thank you for the giveaway.
What a wonderful excerpt. The rest must be amazing, too!
Sounds like a good read.
looks like a wonderful Austen variation
denise
I love Maria Grace's books. Keeping my fingers crossed!
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